you want detailed pickings for errors??? Here goes...

The bottom flap where it says "Damian's intrinsic style is distinctive and clean"... it's too close together with those chairs ...... seriously

And on the right flap... the left bleed margin for the heading is not equal (?) to the right... too close to the edge kinda.

Otherwise looks good

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good color choice, looks nice and clean

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Amazing as always.
Maybe you should put your logo in that blank space there


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that's what i was going to say...

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First i tought it would be a cube, before i read the description. Looks good though

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Add stock images to both the right and top panel as you have the bottom and left.

Find something to fill the center panel, maybe your logo centered with lots of empty space around it for a minimalistic look?

Why is the top panel not in the same background gradient as the other 3 edge panels?

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alright... so, the text quote on the bottom flap "Damian's intrinsic style is distinctive and clean" is definitely too close to the image...

the whole piece is not consistant... only having images on 2 of the 4 flaps as well as the mixing of different gradiants, and changing of the left / right justification seems to detract a little bit... it doesn't flow very well...

as to the copy:

top panel... your first sentance, while seemingly accurate, may quickly lose readers.

right panel... 'a likeness for art' would mean that you are similar to, the word i think you are going for would be fondness, again. also, i would replace the word 'doodled' with 'dabbled'... or not talk about a lack of interest in other subjects, it can be detrimental to prospective clients/employers, especially if they are in a field you just downplayed.

left panel... watching you pass judgement on your country of origin, at least for me, puts a sour taste in my mouth. i understand that you feel it important to tell people why you left your home in an attempt to find a better chance, but literally insulting your homeplace seems a little rude...

bottom panel... you are missing crucial puncation. it should read: However, in the world of design, a style is truly devised from that of the client, and this is a concept that Damian truly understands.

actually, there's more i could mention, but i'm not going to. i would think long and hard about the copy you have written. it is crucial to getting your point across. your design will certainly speak for itself, as you mention several times, but if you make a lot of mistakes in your writing, you may lose a potential client / employers.

on that same note, i would like to mention that words tend to get lost quickly. most of the time, people don't read, or merely skim what you've written. time is money, as they say, and people no longer seem interested in wasting money on reading. you might want to consider trimming this down just a little, try and get your point across a bit quicker, and somewhat more concisely. do something different than what i've done here, because i've written far more than most people are willing to read.

it looks good, and i think that in the end it will work well for you. i'm sorry if it seems like i'm picking this apart too hard, and i will understand if you don't agree with my suggestions.

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I agree with most things that you've said in which I was quite aware of. I'll take a look at the gradient as well as the justification.

Insulting my country? Ok, you got my disagreement there because stating facts isn't insult nor is it hard to believe that my country doesn't have an appreciation for design. An insult is something untrue.

On the note that people don't read... you're missing something. When someone is interested in your work, they read your resume right? They read your cover-letter? I read your long comment. Why? Cuz it's of my interest so maybe what you should say is that I need to peek the viewers interest.

I didn't explain this much or what it's about but ahh, in my final I will and lot mmorew ould be understood. I'm concerned right now with the layout so I'll be taking a look at this with you comments in mind.

I must say thanks for the detailed break down, that was really cool so thanks.

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Type Stuff:

Generally, there's to much of it. You should look for ways for the viewer to not need to read as much. The quotes are a start, but I feel like there's just to much copy for a busy art director to read.

More leading on your body copy! I need some space to breath.

You should use "Roman Hanging Punctuation" on your everything. Right now, it doesn't feel justified correctly. This will solve that. It will also strengthen your body areas.

In the bottom panel, there is to much tension between the chair and the quote (they are just to close together). Find a way to pull them apart, to relieve some tension.

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